Thursday, October 20, 2005

Bad Writing on the Web

The opening two sentences:

The camera rolls for the first time for a Reality TV show which the cast members are supposed to collect footage of another haunted place. The process of getting the cast members together would be a daunting task and each detail as it would become was the thought of how the viewers would really have their imagination captured.

Credit goes to Nickolaus Pacione. The story is called "In the Reflection of a Lens."

Don't read it expecting it to get better. It doesn't. Quick, toss Mr. Pacione a copy of "The Elements of Style" (thanks to an anonymous commenter for reminding me of this book.)

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